help/share-desktop: Updated and improved wording

Changed "desktop viewing application" to "desktop sharing application"
when talking about a VNC server. Simplified language, improved grammar
and word order.

1 files changed, 35 insertions, 21 deletions

diff --git a/help/C/share-desktop.page b/help/C/share-desktop.page
index 08a7dd6b..f7cf463d 100644
--- a/help/C/share-desktop.page
+++ b/help/C/share-desktop.page
@@ -5,14 +5,19 @@
   <info>
     <link type="guide" xref="index#advanced"/>
     <desc>
-      Share the desktop with your contacts.
+      Show your desktop to your contacts.
     </desc>
     <revision pkgversion="2.28" version="0.1" date="2009-08-02" status="stub"/>
     <revision pkgversion="2.28" version="0.2" date="2009-08-10" status="review"/>
+    <revision pkgversion="2.28" version="0.3" date="2009-09-05" status="review"/>
     <credit type="author">
       <name>Milo Casagrande</name>
       <email>milo@ubuntu.com</email>
     </credit>
+    <credit type="author">
+      <name>Ekaterina Gerasimova</name>
+      <email>kittykat3756@gmail.com</email>
+    </credit>
     <license>
       <p>Creative Commons Share Alike 3.0</p>
     </license>    
@@ -28,62 +33,71 @@
   <title>Share your desktop</title>
 
   <p>
-    It is possible, with some of your contacts, to share your desktop with them, or to start
-     using your contacts desktop. You can use
-     this functionality to show your desktop to your contacts, to ask for help or to
-     help your contacts resolve a problem.
+    It is possible to share your desktop with some of your contacts. You can
+    use this functionality to show your desktop to your contacts to, for
+    example, ask for help or help your contacts resolve a problem.
   </p>
 
   <note style="tip">
     <p>
-      In order to be able to share your desktop or to remotely use your contacts desktop,
-       it is necessary to have a remote desktop viewer application installed in your system.
+      To be able to share your desktop, you need to have a VNC server, which
+      has support for the feature, installed on your system. <app>Vino</app>,
+      the GNOME VNC server, has the required support.
     </p>
   </note>
 
   <steps>
     <item>
       <p>
-        From the <gui>Contact List</gui> window, perform one of the following:
+        From the <gui>Contact List</gui> window, do one of the following:
       </p>
       <list>
         <item>
           <p>
-            Select the contact you want to share your desktop with, and choose
-             <guiseq><gui>Edit</gui><gui>Contact</gui><gui>Share my desktop</gui></guiseq>.
+            Select the contact you want to share your desktop with and choose
+            <guiseq><gui>Edit</gui><gui>Contact</gui>
+	    <gui>Share My Desktop</gui></guiseq>.
           </p>
         </item>
         <item>
           <p>
-            Right-click on the name of the contact you want to share your desktop with,
-             and select <gui>Share my desktop</gui>.
+            Right-click on the name of the contact you want to share your
+	    desktop with and select <gui>Share My Desktop</gui>.
           </p>
         </item>
       </list>
     </item>
     <item>
       <p>
-        A request will be sent to the contact you want to share your desktop with.
-         If they accept, the default remote desktop viewer application will be launched in
-         order to permit you to disconnect the user that is controlling your desktop.
+	An invitation to view your desktop will be sent to the contact you have
+	selected. To view your desktop, they will need to accept it.
       </p>
+    </item>
+    <item>
       <p>
-        For more information about how to use the remote desktop viewer application,
-         refer to its help.
+        You can disconnect the contact from your computer using your desktop
+	sharing application.
       </p>
+      <note>
+        <p>
+	  For more information about how to use the remote desktop sharing
+	  application, refer to its help.
+        </p>
+      </note>
     </item>
   </steps>
 
   <p>
     When you share your desktop with someone else, it is possible to experience
-     system performance slowdown and low Internet speed.
+    system performance slowdown and low Internet speed.
   </p>
 
   <note>
     <p>
-      Not all your contacts might be able to support this functionality. It is necessary
-       for them to have at least the 2.28 version of <app>Empathy</app> and a remote desktop
-       viewer application installed in their system.
+      Some of your contacts may not be able to use this feature. It is
+      necessary for them to have version 2.28, or newer, of <app>Empathy</app>
+      and a compatible remote desktop viewer application installed in their
+      system.
     </p>
   </note>